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It weighs on me.
My shoulders
My back
My heart.

It pulls me down
To the pits of disspair
Where I lie in the cold
Slowly dying.

This burden I carry,
It is too heavy
For one such as I.

Choking me,
Killing me,
Cutting my wings
Of freedom.

Colder
And colder,
I wait to die,
To shrivel up
And Fly.

But it never comes,
For I have this burden
weighing me down.
For it is too heavy
To fly.
This is for a contest that I am currently in, and I hope someone enjoys this in one way or another (^u^)
. . . "One Way! Or Another! I'm gonna find you! I'm gonna get'cha get'cha get'cha get'cha! One way! Maybe next week! . . ." hehehe I had to do it~ 
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PandaNotes Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2015
This was brilliant! :clap:
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2015  Student General Artist
What did you like about it? And thank you so much! I'm glad I've been told that my work is liked so much. :hug:
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PandaNotes Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2015
I think I loved how the burden became or at least felt physical, though it was more of an emotional burden. I found the poem very relatable for reasons I won't bother going into. Also it just flowed nicely, really it was a joy to read! You are very welcome! :hug:  
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2015  Student General Artist
:blush::blush::blush: :tighthug::hug::tighthug:
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PandaNotes Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2015
:hug:
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yasminopalcaster Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahhh this is really great and I have to also say that I love the last three stanzas, because they are really beautiful. <33

Best of luck to you in the contest! :la:

((Love the song reference by the way in the description. XD)) 
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you~!

and

It's such a catchy song, it's been in my head since last year XD And, I mean, reall, how can you not? :rofl:
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yasminopalcaster Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. :aww:

It really is a catchy song. XDD
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Maclafel7 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice imagery!  The "choking" and "cutting" of wings really portrays the struggle you intended, I think.  I'm glad you worked something out :D
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you, so am I XD 
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Pikachewy99 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really love the last three stanzas! The part with the wings is just so beautiful to me... :iconlazycryplz:
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Student General Artist
:iconrainbowsqueeplz: Thank you~!!!!
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OpalChariot Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lol nice job! XD
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Student General Artist
xD Thank you~ I just made something completely different for the contest with all the homework, I couldn't edit the story ;P
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OpalChariot Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I have a toooon of homework too XD Did u read my poem?
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Just saw it, let me read it xD
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