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It weighs on me.
My shoulders
My back
My heart.

It pulls me down
To the pits of disspair
Where I lie in the cold
Slowly dying.

This burden I carry,
It is too heavy
For one such as I.

Choking me,
Killing me,
Cutting my wings
Of freedom.

Colder
And colder,
I wait to die,
To shrivel up
And Fly.

But it never comes,
For I have this burden
weighing me down.
For it is too heavy
To fly.
This is for a contest that I am currently in, and I hope someone enjoys this in one way or another (^u^)
. . . "One Way! Or Another! I'm gonna find you! I'm gonna get'cha get'cha get'cha get'cha! One way! Maybe next week! . . ." hehehe I had to do it~ 
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yasminopalcaster Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahhh this is really great and I have to also say that I love the last three stanzas, because they are really beautiful. <33

Best of luck to you in the contest! :la:

((Love the song reference by the way in the description. XD)) 
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:icongothicloverultimate:
GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you~!

and

It's such a catchy song, it's been in my head since last year XD And, I mean, reall, how can you not? :rofl:
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yasminopalcaster Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome. :aww:

It really is a catchy song. XDD
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Maclafel7 Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice imagery!  The "choking" and "cutting" of wings really portrays the struggle you intended, I think.  I'm glad you worked something out :D
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2014  Student General Artist
Thank you, so am I XD 
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Pikachewy99 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I really love the last three stanzas! The part with the wings is just so beautiful to me... :iconlazycryplz:
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Student General Artist
:iconrainbowsqueeplz: Thank you~!!!!
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OpalChariot Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lol nice job! XD
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GothicLoverUltimate Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Student General Artist
xD Thank you~ I just made something completely different for the contest with all the homework, I couldn't edit the story ;P
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OpalChariot Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I have a toooon of homework too XD Did u read my poem?
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